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Tuesday, October 12, 2010, 4:31 PM
Loving a geek like me
Fanfic: Loving a Geek Like MeAuthor: ImaSUPERSHINeeGirl
Reviewer: Elizabeth
Title: 5/5
I like it because it sort of tells the story in the title already.
Background/Poster: 5/5
I like how your poster showed all of your characters(well that and the pink background, one of my fav colors!) and the font of the title is very pretty.
Forwards: 8/10
I wish you would have said more but I like that you have quotes that make people want to read it. It also shows how much drama there would be in the story.
Plot: 14/15
I’ve read a ton of stories like this but I so didn’t see what was going to happen to Yuri and Taec. And also what happened with Taeminnie O.o
Originality/Creativity: 13/15
Like I said, I’ve read a lot of stories like this but there are also many parts in your story that are new and different from the others I’ve read.
Flow: 9/10
It feels like it’s going a bit slow for me, but I think it’s still a pretty good pace, not super slow at least.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10
I only found several grammar problems like there wasn’t a apostrophe in wont and also cant but I think there weren’t that many. Also there were missing capitol letters here and there. However here are some mistakes you should fix:
“,…Like a small child who are given a candy”(Chapter 4). Should have been along the lines of,”… Like a small child given candy.”
“,…I left our house…”(Chapter 4) whose house besides her? (I mean I know that it’s also her mom’s but yea.. it doesn’t say in the sentence)
“I know that their hatred were much more stronger now than the time I first came to this school”(ch.13) I think would have been better if it were like this: “I know that their hatred was much stronger now than compared to the first time I came to the school.”
“…This was the best afternoon that happened to my life”(ch15). Should be something like :”… This was the best afternoon in my 15 years of existence.”
“Taemin & I sat at the swing as the other oppas talked on their own handphone they are calling everyone they know just to find Yuri-ah, specially Jonghyun who is very, very eagerly”(ch15) This sentence actually had several mistakes in it, and here is a way that you could rewrite it ,” Taemin and I sat at the swings as the other oppas talked on the own handphones, calling everyone they know to find Yuri-ah, especially Jonghyun who was very eager to find her.”
*In two-storey buildings in ch 14, story was misspelled.*
Other than those mistakes, I didn’t really find anything else.
Characterization: 15/15
You made it clear of their personalities throughout the story.
Writing Style: 10/10
Your writing style is sort of like mine! It’s very well written.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I don’t really like school girl ones but yours was very well written and was fun to read.
Total: 91/100
Please update soon because I want to know what happened to Taemin! But on the other hand, good luck with Dance and Gymnastics(2 things I wished I could do xD)
Labels: Elizabeth