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Friday, April 30, 2010, 8:31 PM
Fanfic: Accidentally in LoveAuthor: wertias_sk5
Reviewer: Tammy
Title: 3/5 – It’s not very new nor does it sound very interesting. Especially in a site like winglin, many titles have gone around with the same name and almost many had the same plot. Though it has a cheeky side to it!
Background/Poster: 3/5: The pictures within the poster are well chosen and it fit perfectly. The neutralism of the purple is very calming and pleasing to the reader’s eyes. Although the background seemed a little plain, it would’ve been better if you added faded pictures or quotes.
Forewords: 6/10: I’m sorry but your forewords are lacking attention towards the capital letters and punctuation. Just one scan through and I could easily see many mistakes already. Keep an eye on the letters that needs to be capitalized. Microsoft Word can help you with this.
Plot: 10/15: It happened to be familiar, but since you’ve already written out a summary in the forewords, I basically figured out the whole story. You write too much dialogue, adding a little more description in the actions and the feelings of the character would make it better.
Creativity/Originality: 10/15: As I have said before, it is very similar to others I have read, and I have read many. But not everyone’s can be exactly the same, I’m glad you added your own twists on the way Yunho and her meet.
Flow: 9/10: Since it’s a one shot as well as having long 2 chapters, the flow was at an okay pace.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10: It was okay, but it would be better if you use bigger words, thesauruses usually help with this. It can add more meaning to the actions your w=trying to display. We would be able to imagine it more. The notes at the top of the page were a little distracting, especially with the overuse of the asteris.
Characterization: 14/15: DBSK is one of my favourite bands and their characters are well portrayed. A little disappointed that you killed off my favourite member but it doesn’t really matter, as it is needed for the plot. The character change since the beginning of the story has drastically changed until the end and you’ve written it ok.
Writing Style: 8/10: a line every dialogue can get boring at times, it’s just like reading a script. If there were more thoughts in there as well as actions, having to focus on what they actually feel, it’s better for the readers as they can easily grasp the real minds of the characters.
Overall enjoyment: 4/5
Total: 74/100
Labels: Tammy