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Thursday, August 12, 2010, 11:03 AM
Not Fated

fanfic: Not Fated
author: CharleneSa
reviewer: Tammy

Title: 3/5: The title seems interesting but it is not catchy enough. It’s a bit plain and very easily guessed.


Background/Poster: 5/5: The poster is nice, very elegant and eye catching. The photos chosen for the poster are very blending with the colours.


Forewords: 3/10: You skipped this part. I understand how you feel about that but; the purpose of the purpose is for the people to know the characters and maybe a teaser of your storyline.


Plot: 10/15: The plot was indeed very short and straight to the point. I am glad to the fact that it actually blended in with the title. But it is missing a lot of things. It would’ve been better if you made Charlene do something about the fact that Aaron was leaving her. It would show how in love they actually were.


Creativity/Originality: 7/15: I have read a lot of these things and yours is no different. It seems like it’s some sort of a remake for a drama in short formatted way. You could’ve added a little more flavour into it.


Flow: 8/10: The flow was a bit bumpy; I found it hard to read some stuff that you typed because either you had random information brackets or the fact that you don’t put spaces after the periods or the commas.


Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10: the spelling is okay. The vocabulary is okay too, although it would be better if you were to use bigger words. The punctuation though is a little lacking. Speech marks would differentiate from quotation marks. Also a space after a comma and a period mark is important for a much clearer reading of the actual text.


Characterization:15 /15: I like the fact that you didn’t have much characters here and is very easily understood.


Writing Style: 10/10: A little longer next time. More description.


Overall enjoyment: 3/5

Total: 68/100

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Friday, April 30, 2010, 8:31 PM

Fanfic: Accidentally in Love
Author: wertias_sk5
Reviewer: Tammy


Title: 3/5 – It’s not very new nor does it sound very interesting. Especially in a site like winglin, many titles have gone around with the same name and almost many had the same plot. Though it has a cheeky side to it!


Background/Poster: 3/5: The pictures within the poster are well chosen and it fit perfectly. The neutralism of the purple is very calming and pleasing to the reader’s eyes. Although the background seemed a little plain, it would’ve been better if you added faded pictures or quotes.


Forewords: 6/10: I’m sorry but your forewords are lacking attention towards the capital letters and punctuation. Just one scan through and I could easily see many mistakes already. Keep an eye on the letters that needs to be capitalized. Microsoft Word can help you with this.


Plot: 10/15: It happened to be familiar, but since you’ve already written out a summary in the forewords, I basically figured out the whole story. You write too much dialogue, adding a little more description in the actions and the feelings of the character would make it better.


Creativity/Originality: 10/15: As I have said before, it is very similar to others I have read, and I have read many. But not everyone’s can be exactly the same, I’m glad you added your own twists on the way Yunho and her meet.


Flow: 9/10: Since it’s a one shot as well as having long 2 chapters, the flow was at an okay pace.


Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10: It was okay, but it would be better if you use bigger words, thesauruses usually help with this. It can add more meaning to the actions your w=trying to display. We would be able to imagine it more. The notes at the top of the page were a little distracting, especially with the overuse of the asteris.


Characterization: 14/15: DBSK is one of my favourite bands and their characters are well portrayed. A little disappointed that you killed off my favourite member but it doesn’t really matter, as it is needed for the plot. The character change since the beginning of the story has drastically changed until the end and you’ve written it ok.


Writing Style: 8/10: a line every dialogue can get boring at times, it’s just like reading a script. If there were more thoughts in there as well as actions, having to focus on what they actually feel, it’s better for the readers as they can easily grasp the real minds of the characters.

Overall enjoyment: 4/5

Total: 74/100

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