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Friday, April 23, 2010, 4:46 PM

Memento Of Ours
Author: Susan Lee
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/suxsan5/
Reviewer: Melissa @Kaleidoscope Kreations

Title: 4/5
There was a spelling mistake in the title of your story. Otherwise, the title was great. It portrayed the story well and it gave us an idea on what the story is about.

Background/Poster: 5/5
The background poster matched well with the story. You chose appropriate colors and it wasn’t hard to read the text.

Forewords: 9/10
Forewords were good. It was good that you took an excerpt from your story to give us an idea of the plot line, but didn’t give so much information so that you give away the plot line to keep your readers interested. You could explain Minkyung a bit more. There wasn’t enough background information on Minkyung to really understand her character.

Plot: 13/15
Plot was written with thought and detail. In some parts, it wasn’t clear whether it was a flashback or reality. As I said in the forewords, explain some small details, like how Minkyung lived with Big Bang. Your story didn’t drag on about one thing for too long, so it wasn’t boring to read. You also switched point of views quite frequently to explain situations, which was good. I felt that the ending was too short, and that the ‘Happily ever after’ was such a short time after the incident. After Uee gets sent away, Minkyung brightens up almost instantly and get back together with Daesung. She wasn’t shocked, or sad that one of her best friends tried to frame her.

Creativity/Originality: 14/15
Your story was somewhat original, and it was creative. The plot was different, which will catch the readers interest for sure.

Flow: 9/10
Your story flowed well. You didn’t move through the story too fast or too slow so that your readers will understand the situation at hand. The ending, however, as I mentioned above, moved too fast.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
There were minor spelling mistakes, and had some weird sentence structure.

Characterization: 13/15
Your characters weren’t described enough. It felt like they didn’t have much personality and there wasn’t enough background information like family experiences, problems etc on each character to really get to know them, so that your readers will feel how they feel.

Writing Style: 10/10
Your writing style is easy to comprehend and really set the mood for the story. Amount of description was ample and well written.

Overall enjoyment: 5/5
Great story overall. It really kept me reading until the very end.

Total: 90/100

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