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Sunday, June 27, 2010, 8:51 PM
2+2 Could Equal Me And You

Fanfic: 2+2 Could Equal Me And You
Author: susan lee :]
Reviewer: Melissa



Title: 5/5
Very creative title! Although at first, I didn’t know how math would conjure love...

Background/Poster: 5/5
The colors and pictures that you used for the poster showed that this story was going to be a fun, humorous type story, and that I would enjoy reading this very much.

Forewords: 9/10
I would really like it if you could put a bit more description or background information for each of the characters, like did their parents get divorced, had education issues etc.

Plot: 15/15
Your plot was well structured, and you introduced the characters well. The scenes were well organized and I could follow your thoughts. The main point of this story is clear to me, and it was easy to follow.

Creativity/Originality: 15/15
I thought it was creative and original. You used lots of description and displayed the characters feelings well, and used humor often, which kept me reading. Instead of having two lifelong friends fall in love with each other, you changed it so that you had a tutor and a student, which made it more interesting.

Flow: 8/10
Most of it flowed well, you didn’t go to fast of too slow. Although, sometimes, the way you end one chapter, and start another can be a little confusing. In one chapter, it ended with Yoobin trying to sleep, and in the beginning of the next chapter, Kangin was walking out of her room. If you included Kangin walking in to see if she was okay, it would be easier to follow.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
Good vocabulary overall. I didn’t come across any spelling mistakes and sentence structure was well done.

Characterization: 14/15
Again, you displayed the characters feelings well, and I could ‘feel’ them. However, it didn’t explain why Eunhyuk wasn’t smart in the first place. No background on issues about doing bad in school at all.

Writing Style: 10/10
Writing style is well done. Changes of scenes are clear. Thoughts and feelings are well defined.

Overall enjoyment: 4.5/5


Total: 95.5/100

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