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Friday, July 23, 2010, 11:37 AM
A Bittersweet Twist of Life

Fanfic: A Bittersweet Twist of Life
Author: babyHaeYobo
Reviewer: Melissa



Title: 5/5 - I really like the title! It gives the readers a hint that something unexpected is going to happen!



Background/Poster:3/5- At first glance, it seems like it will be a very happy story, based on the bright colors and lettering. But throughout the story, Sungmin kept having flashbacks on his late love, so it doesn’t really reflect on the background/poster. I would’ve used something a little darker, so that the colors do reflect on some of the chapters.



Forewords:10/10- Quick, short and sweet. Just how I like it! :) It tells you the general idea of what is going to happen and what to expect.



Plot:15/15- Good solid plot. Very easy to follow.


Creativity/Originality:14/15- This story is very creative, but it has the typical story of one’s love dying, but they aren’t actually dead, come back and find that their lover has moved on. You know what I’m saying? :) Try adding some sort of twist that not a lot of people have seen.


Flow:10/10- Story flows well and chapters don’t skip scenes to suddenly.



Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary:8/10- Much better, but I still found some minor mistakes in your story:



In the second chapter, it should not be “I and Sungmin”, but “Sungmin and I”

“Teukie-hyung will be very much mad at me” should be “Teukie-hyung will be really mad at me” or “very mad at me” or “so mad at me”

Be sure to double-check your story and make sure that you have the correct tenses and the correct sentence structure. Make sure that your sentences flow smoothly, as if you were talking to someone else.



Characterization:15/15- Characters were interesting each of them had their own unique personalities. This made it interesting and enjoyable to read.



Writing Style:9/10- Some of the dialogues were hard to understand, but overall, it was good. Your personality shows through your writing! :)



Overall enjoyment: 5/5



Total: 94/100

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