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Thursday, August 12, 2010, 11:03 AM
Not Fated

fanfic: Not Fated
author: CharleneSa
reviewer: Tammy

Title: 3/5: The title seems interesting but it is not catchy enough. It’s a bit plain and very easily guessed.


Background/Poster: 5/5: The poster is nice, very elegant and eye catching. The photos chosen for the poster are very blending with the colours.


Forewords: 3/10: You skipped this part. I understand how you feel about that but; the purpose of the purpose is for the people to know the characters and maybe a teaser of your storyline.


Plot: 10/15: The plot was indeed very short and straight to the point. I am glad to the fact that it actually blended in with the title. But it is missing a lot of things. It would’ve been better if you made Charlene do something about the fact that Aaron was leaving her. It would show how in love they actually were.


Creativity/Originality: 7/15: I have read a lot of these things and yours is no different. It seems like it’s some sort of a remake for a drama in short formatted way. You could’ve added a little more flavour into it.


Flow: 8/10: The flow was a bit bumpy; I found it hard to read some stuff that you typed because either you had random information brackets or the fact that you don’t put spaces after the periods or the commas.


Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10: the spelling is okay. The vocabulary is okay too, although it would be better if you were to use bigger words. The punctuation though is a little lacking. Speech marks would differentiate from quotation marks. Also a space after a comma and a period mark is important for a much clearer reading of the actual text.


Characterization:15 /15: I like the fact that you didn’t have much characters here and is very easily understood.


Writing Style: 10/10: A little longer next time. More description.


Overall enjoyment: 3/5

Total: 68/100

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