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Monday, September 6, 2010, 8:45 PM
Lifeless Soul
Story Title: Lifeless SoulAuthor:Shadow
Reviewer: Melissa
Title: 5/5 - Title depicts a sad or depressed character. I could tell what I was going to be reading. Nice job!
Background/Poster:5/5- Dark and gloomy. Fits the story well.
Forewords:9/10- A little depressing. I felt really...I don’t know how to say this...but I felt sad that this was how you felt in reality! D: Don’t be sad!!!
Plot:15/15- Flows well. Not your everyday story that you see on winglin. Nice to see a change! ^^
Creativity/Originality:15/15- It’s different! I like it! Although it is a bit dark, it is a well written story.
Flow:10/10- Everything makes sense and fits together.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary:8/10- I did find some grammar and spelling mistakes, I didn’t list all of them, just a couple examples.
“Her parents, her cousins and her friends, neither one of them managed to fully understood her.” should be “ Her parents, her cousins and her friends, neither one of them managed to fully understand her” “Thankfully, the mirror did not break nor her delicate arms but she was still unsatisfied.” should be “Thankfully, the mirror nor her delicate arms broke, but she was still unsatisfied.”
Characterization:15/15- Depicts a sad, depressed girl well. Well done!
Writing Style:10/10- Very detailed and precise. I could picture the events happening in my mind.
Overall enjoyment: 5/5
Total:97 /100
Labels: Melissa