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Thursday, January 13, 2011, 7:51 PM
Raindrops on my window
Author: FlyxToxHeavenStory Title: Raindrops on my window
Reviewer: Melissa
Title: 5/5 -
Depicts a sad and emotional story that is to be told, catches my interest.
Background/Poster:5/5-
dark colours match the title well and it shows the emotion and sadness that this story will tell.
Forewords:9/10-
"I wonder if you can see us...Cassiopea. We're the bright stars that litter the sky, watching over you, waiting for you. Please, don't fade from our sites" <--I'm wondering if this is the forewords? If it is, it depicts the storyline very well and definitely has lots of sadness put into it.
Plot:15/15-
I'm a huge fan of DBSK and I was quite emotional reading this one-shot. Nearly brought me to tears. Especially when Changmin and Yunho were standing up on the roof. This piece made me realize how much I've missed them, the five of them together. This plot was amazing.
Creativity/Originality:15/15-
Your story is quite original and very creative. The way you described each and every detail brings this one-shot to life.
Flow:10/10-
You didn't rush it, nor did you go too slow. When you went from one member to another, it wasn't too confusing and it was easy to follow. You went at such a speed, that the reader can soak up their emotions and actually feel it. Well done.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary:6/10-
You didn't have very many grammatical errors, just little spelling errors. and at the very beginning, you used a homonym. "Please, don't fade from our sites" I think you mean "Please, don't fade from our sights?"
Characterization:15/15-
You described each and every member clearly. How they were feeling and their expressions were well described. This made it very easy to picture in my mind.
Writing Style:7/10-
A little confusing at the beginning between Yoochun and Jaejong. At the end of that scene, especially, when you said "Instead, he reached out a delicate hand, that shook from the tremors racking his body, and touched the window." Then it goes to Jaejong standing outside. Woah, I thought this was still talking about Yoochun. If you had indicated that the scene was going to change, it would have made this part less confusing
Overall enjoyment: 5/5
Total: 92/100
Labels: Melissa