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Tuesday, March 22, 2011, 5:56 PM
I Am A Neko, But You'll Still Love Me Right
Author: Sujugirl911Story Title: I Am A Neko, But You'll Still Love Me Right?
Reviewer: Melissa @ Kaleidoscope Kreations
Title: 3/5 -Not the most eye catching title, I have to say. Most titles would have a hint of mystery or wonder to them, which would pull the reader into reading the story. By reading your title, I can already tell what the general plot will be.
Background/Poster:N/A-No poster or banner
Forewords:6/10-Good introduction but minimal background information on the main character. Although, I thought that the Super Junior members found out too quickly that your main character was in fact a human in your foreword. Didn't it progress a little too quickly? And how did Kangin and the rest of the members find out in the first place? Was the whole just about falling in love with a member? Was she trying not to get caught or not? It also seems like your Foreword was pretty much another chapter of your story. A foreword just serves as a reason of why the reader should read the story. A simple marketing tool.
Plot: 10/15- Again, as I mentioned above, it looks like there are many gaps in the plot. Lots of questions left unanswered. I still don't understand the main character's full situation. How was she brought to the dorms? And no explanation whatsoever about why she was cursed. Where is her family now? Why did they abandon her? Why was it just her?
Creativity/Originality:10/15- Chapters were not as detailed as I anticipated them to be. Very short as well. Could use more description with the setting as well as facial expressions and body language.
Flow:10/10- Flow is good, no choppy chapters.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary:8/10- I found some misuse of some words in your story. Like: "I converted my eyes to the bathroom door" in chapter 5. The right word should be "averted". Other than that, sentence structure and grammar is fine.
Characterization:12/15-I feel that the main character has very little personality. The main character feels static, and doesn't go through any big problems that drastically change her emotions. She's just happy all the time.
Writing Style:9/10- Understandable and clear writing.
Overall enjoyment: 3/5
Total: 71/95
Labels: Melissa