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Wednesday, May 11, 2011, 9:24 PM
Perfect Lover

Story Title: Perfect Lover
Author: BeBeYB
Reviewer: Melissa


Title: 5/5 - Interesting title, catches attention

Background/Poster: 5/5- Great graphic design. Simple and it looks well done and catches my attention.

Forewords: 8/10- The forewords was informative and gave a great introduction to the story.

Plot: 14/15- Hey! This is a spinoff of Absolute boyfriend, so I am familiar with this plot. I have to say, it has too great of a similarity to the manga. But it flows well and characters are interesting enough to make me continue to read. But I have to say, the ending was a little confusing, so thank you for the explanation at the end!

Creativity/Originality:14/15- I did have to take a mark off because of the resemblance to the manga, but otherwise, the characters and events are original.

Flow:10/10-No holes or rough transitions between chapters. Well done.


Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 4/10- Now this is the part where I get quite picky. First of all the grammar in this story was terrible. (this part I did not write down but was JiYong's view) should have been (I did not write this part down, but it was JiYong's point of view) Soo Hyun thought for a moment confused but remember JiYong was a doll. Should be written like this: Soo Hyun thought for a moment, confused, but remembered that JiYoung was a doll. The punctuation in this story was also not so good. I barely saw commas where they were supposed to be. No one spoke no one moved. It should be written like this: No one spoke, no one moved. Some sentences were awkward too. Today I fill really rejoice and happy could be Today I felt overwhelmingly happy.
Make sure that you check your spelling and grammar before you publish your work. Sometimes I couldn't get the feeling that the character was trying to portray because of the awkward sentences.


Characterization:15/15-The characters were very well developed and I felt lots of sadness with JiYoung and Yuri. Well done.


Writing Style: 9/10- As I said, a little awkward, but overall, nice job.


Overall enjoyment: 5/5


Total: 89/100

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